Baby’s Baby Boomers - Teen pregnancy on the incline is growing trend.
It has been some time now that the “Baby Boom” generation has been conceived; most of this four hundred thousand plus generation will be retiring within the next few years. But what of the new baby boomers? A rise in teen pregnancy after a 15 year decline has the attention of some of the nations brightest minds.
According to the National Center for Health Statistics pregnancy in teens was on a steady decline for 15 years before a dramatic three to five percent national rise in 2006/2007. Although this may not seem like a big increase the numbers translate to about three in every ten teenage girls becoming pregnant at least once before they are twenty years of age. Repeat pregnancies may account for as much as twenty percent in some parts of the country.[ NCHS] The National Campaign to Prevent Teen and Unplanned Pregnancy claims that babies born to teens in 2004 will cost taxpayers 9.1 billion dollars over time. This figure includes increased costs to public assistance, public sector health care, child welfare and state prisons and lower taxes paid by teen parents and their children over their lifetimes. Although the difference of birth rate varies for different ethnicities the NCHS rules out race as a potential factor in national birth rate.
The causes for such increases over the past two years range widely in theories widely from restriction of funding for certain types of sexual education, to religious background and belief, even personal need to feel accepted in society by older peers. But most of the data collected by various organizations points mostly to the fact that no highly effective sex education or HIV prevention education program is eligible for federal funding because mandates prohibit educating teenagers about the benefits of condoms and contraception. [American Foundation for Aids Research] The government will only allow funding for sexual education programs that teach abstinence until marriage which, according to the researchers at Columbia University “virginity pledge programs increase pledge-takers’ risk for sexually transmitted infections and pregnancy”. The study concluded that 88 percent of pledge-takers initiated sex prior to marriage even though some delayed sex for a while. Rates of sexually transmitted infections among pledge takers and non-pledge takers were similar, even though pledge-takers initiated sex later. Pledge-takers were less likely to seek STI testing and less likely to use contraception when they did have sex”. [Bruckner H., Bearman P]
Another cause to this new age baby boom sensation is the growing amount of support and acceptance for teenage mothers in society. As if they have done something they should be rewarded for, as if getting pregnant before marriage or even before they are allowed to vote is some sort of good deed. As unsettling as this may be it is true and maybe confusing for teenage girls. When teenage girls see celebrities that star on kid network television channels like Jamie Lynn Spears get pregnant and then pregnant again four months after the delivery of her first child they may be getting mixed signals. Or when seventeen year old Mackenzie McCollum was benched from her high school volley ball team until cleared via doctors note because she had gotten pregnant and her mother filed four suits against the athletic committee because they do not require doctor notation for none-pregnant student athletes. The mother Barbra Horton (note last names of mother and daughter) has been quoted saying “My goal is for them to change their policies to include pregnant athletes” and “to nurture pregnant athletes, and to make sure that these athletes are successful”. [Hatch] I think I make my point. What is the country coming to when we almost reward our children for doing something that is simply irresponsible?
Concluding the main cause of birth increase in teenagers is the lack of knowledge about contraception and condoms and that new norm in society when everyone is a winner despite how much they are failing. The teens are less informed about “safe sex” and more informed about being morally correct and given basically two options; be abstinent until someone will tell them the truth, Or learn on their own. And that is mostly the problem, we have to many young explorers taking adventures with no navigation system and unfortunately they don’t realize how far off they really are until they get a flat. Unfortunately the government doesn’t only have difficulty with the problems of the future but apparently are unable to read well documented statistics. In one recent study 94 percent of adults and 93 percent of parents said that sex education should cover contraception. Only 15 percent of Americans wanted abstinence-only education taught in the classroom. [National Public Radio et al] It just makes more sense to educate instead of attempting to refrain.
Having a baby is not the only repercussion that will come of teenage pregnancies. Each year these babies cost the tax payers over nine billion dollars. Most teenage parents can not afford a child because they are simply children themselves. Eighty percent of teenage mothers end up on welfare. Most teenage mothers do not finish high school. Only one third of them will finish high school and only one and one half percent will obtain a college degree by age 30. Children birthed by teenage mothers are more likely to do poorly in school and be abused or neglected, boys are thirteen percent more likely to end up in prison while girls are twenty-two percent more likely to become teenage mothers themselves. [NCHS] And so on this cycle will continue unless the education system explains the “rules and regulations” of sex, in place of telling kids just not to do it. And maybe a slap or two in the back of the head when they make a mistake instead of this positive reinforcement for negative action kick that America has been on. If society would just tell the youth to stop screwing up they might just listen.
Sources
National Center for Health Statistics, National Vital Statistics Report, Births: Final Data for 2006, January 2009. Web. Dec.5.2009
National Center for Health Statistics, National Vital Statistics Report, Births: Final Data for 2006, January 2009; National Campaign to Prevent Teen and Unplanned Pregnancy, By the Numbers: The Public Costs of Teen Childbearing, 2006.Web.Dec.5.20009
American Foundation for AIDS Research. Assessing the Efficacy of Abstinence-Only Programs for HIV Prevention among Young People. [Issue Brief, no. 2] Washington, DC: Author, 2005. Web. Dec.5.2009
Brückner H, Bearman P. After the promise: the STD consequences of adolescent virginity pledges. Journal of Adolescent Health 2005; 36:271-278.
Brückner H, Bearman P. Promising the future: virginity pledges and first intercourse. American Journal of Sociology 2001; 106(4):859-912.
National Public Radio et al. Sex Education in America: NPR/Kaiser/Kennedy School Poll. Menlo Park, CA: Kaiser, 2004. Web.Dec.5.2009
Hatch, Amy. Teen Athlete Claims She was Benched for Pregnancy. Parentdish.com. Dec8th2009. Web.dec.10.2009
Post Write.
I like this paper, i feel like i use enough resources and evidence and fully answer the requirments of the assignment
Edit Edit Edit, its never really done is it? At this point i wait for critizism and work from there.
Is it engaging enough, entertaining enough? who wants to be boring.
Did i leave anything vital out, or do I meet the assignment requirments fairly well?
Is it bias or bias sounding truth?
Thursday, December 10, 2009
Monday, December 7, 2009
The Next Generation
Baby Boomers' Babies - Teen pregnancy on the incline a growing trend.
It has been some time now that the “Baby Boom” generation has been conceived, most of this 400 thousand plus generation will be retiring within the next few years. But what of the new baby boomers. A rise in teen pregnancy after a 15 year decline has the attention of some of the nations brightest minds.
According to the NCHS pregnancy in teens was on a steady decline for 15 years before a dramatic three to five percent national raise in 2006/2007.[1] Although this may not seem like a big increase the numbers translate to about three in every ten teenage girls becoming pregnant at least once before they are twenty years of age, And repeat pregnancies may account for as high as twenty percent in some parts of the country.[1] The National Campaign to Prevent Teen and Unplanned Pregnancy claims, babies born to teens in 2004 will cost taxpayers $9.1 billion over time. This figure includes increased costs to public assistance, public sector health care, child welfare and state prisons and lower taxes paid by teen parents and their children over their lifetimes.[2] Although the difference of birth rate varies for different ethnicities the NCHS rules out race as a potential factor in national birth rate.[1]
The causes for such increases over the past two years range in theories widely from restriction of funding for certain types of sexual education, to religious background and belief, even personal need to feel accepted in society by older peers. But most of the date collected by various organizations points mostly to the fact that no highly effective sex education or HIV prevention education program is eligible for federal funding because mandates prohibit educating teenagers about the benefits of condoms and contraception.[3] The government will only allow funding for abstinent until marriage sexual education programs which according to the researchers at Columbia University “virginity pledge programs increase pledge-takers’ risk for sexually transmitted infections and pregnancy. The study concluded that 88 percent of pledge-takers initiated sex prior to marriage even though some delayed sex for a while. Rates of sexually transmitted infections among pledge takers and non-pledge takers were similar, even though pledge-takers initiated sex later. Pledge-takers were less likely to seek STI testing and less likely to use contraception when they did have sex”.[4][5] Concluding the main cause of birth increase in teenagers is the lack of knowledge about contraception and condoms. The teens are less informed about “safe sex” and more informed about being morally correct and given basically two options; be abstinent until someone will tell them the truth, Or learn on there own. And that is mostly the problem, we have to many young explorers taking adventures with no navigation system and unfortunately they don’t realize how far off\ they really are until they get a flat. Unfortunately the government doesn’t only have difficulty with the problems of the future but apparently are unable to read well documented statistics, In one recent study 94 percent of adults and 93 percent of parents said that sex education should cover contraception. Only 15 percent of Americans wanted abstinence-only education taught in the classroom.[6] It just makes more sense to educate instead of attempting to refrain.
Having a baby is not the only repercussion that will become of teenage mommies. Each year these babies cost the tax payers over nine billion dollars. Most teenage parents can not afford a child because they are simply children themselves, eighty percent of teenage mothers end up on welfare. Most teenage mothers do not finish high school. Only one third of them will finish high school and only one and one half percent will obtain a college degree by age 30. Children birthed by teenage mothers are more likely to do poorly in school and be abused or neglected, boys are thirteen percent more likely to end up in prison while girls are twenty-two percent more likely to become teenage mothers themselves.[1] And so on this cycle will continue unless the education system explains the “rules and regulations” of sex, in place of telling kids just not to do it.
Sources
1. National Center for Health Statistics, National Vital Statistics Report, Births: Final Data for 2006, January 2009. Web. Dec.5.2009
2. National Center for Health Statistics, National Vital Statistics Report, Births: Final Data for 2006, January 2009; National Campaign to Prevent Teen and Unplanned Pregnancy, By the Numbers: The Public Costs of Teen Childbearing, 2006.Web.Dec.5.20009
3. American Foundation for AIDS Research. Assessing the Efficacy of Abstinence-Only Programs for HIV Prevention among Young People. [Issue Brief, no. 2] Washington, DC: Author, 2005. Web. Dec.5.2009
4. Brückner H, Bearman P. After the promise: the STD consequences of adolescent virginity pledges. Journal of Adolescent Health 2005; 36:271-278.
5.Bearman PS, Brückner H. Promising the future: virginity pledges and first intercourse. American Journal of Sociology 2001; 106(4):859-912.
6.National Public Radio et al. Sex Education in America: NPR/Kaiser/Kennedy School Poll. Menlo Park, CA: Kaiser, 2004. Web.Dec.5.2009
Post Write.
Im not sure how i feel about this paper so far, its unfinished and it isnt as long as i would like it to be.
I think i want to add another minor cause and a few more effects and lenghten the paper up a bit
Do you think ive responded well to this assignment? Is teen pregnancy clearly defined as a trend in this piece. Is there enough information and statistics to back up my allegations?
It has been some time now that the “Baby Boom” generation has been conceived, most of this 400 thousand plus generation will be retiring within the next few years. But what of the new baby boomers. A rise in teen pregnancy after a 15 year decline has the attention of some of the nations brightest minds.
According to the NCHS pregnancy in teens was on a steady decline for 15 years before a dramatic three to five percent national raise in 2006/2007.[1] Although this may not seem like a big increase the numbers translate to about three in every ten teenage girls becoming pregnant at least once before they are twenty years of age, And repeat pregnancies may account for as high as twenty percent in some parts of the country.[1] The National Campaign to Prevent Teen and Unplanned Pregnancy claims, babies born to teens in 2004 will cost taxpayers $9.1 billion over time. This figure includes increased costs to public assistance, public sector health care, child welfare and state prisons and lower taxes paid by teen parents and their children over their lifetimes.[2] Although the difference of birth rate varies for different ethnicities the NCHS rules out race as a potential factor in national birth rate.[1]
The causes for such increases over the past two years range in theories widely from restriction of funding for certain types of sexual education, to religious background and belief, even personal need to feel accepted in society by older peers. But most of the date collected by various organizations points mostly to the fact that no highly effective sex education or HIV prevention education program is eligible for federal funding because mandates prohibit educating teenagers about the benefits of condoms and contraception.[3] The government will only allow funding for abstinent until marriage sexual education programs which according to the researchers at Columbia University “virginity pledge programs increase pledge-takers’ risk for sexually transmitted infections and pregnancy. The study concluded that 88 percent of pledge-takers initiated sex prior to marriage even though some delayed sex for a while. Rates of sexually transmitted infections among pledge takers and non-pledge takers were similar, even though pledge-takers initiated sex later. Pledge-takers were less likely to seek STI testing and less likely to use contraception when they did have sex”.[4][5] Concluding the main cause of birth increase in teenagers is the lack of knowledge about contraception and condoms. The teens are less informed about “safe sex” and more informed about being morally correct and given basically two options; be abstinent until someone will tell them the truth, Or learn on there own. And that is mostly the problem, we have to many young explorers taking adventures with no navigation system and unfortunately they don’t realize how far off\ they really are until they get a flat. Unfortunately the government doesn’t only have difficulty with the problems of the future but apparently are unable to read well documented statistics, In one recent study 94 percent of adults and 93 percent of parents said that sex education should cover contraception. Only 15 percent of Americans wanted abstinence-only education taught in the classroom.[6] It just makes more sense to educate instead of attempting to refrain.
Having a baby is not the only repercussion that will become of teenage mommies. Each year these babies cost the tax payers over nine billion dollars. Most teenage parents can not afford a child because they are simply children themselves, eighty percent of teenage mothers end up on welfare. Most teenage mothers do not finish high school. Only one third of them will finish high school and only one and one half percent will obtain a college degree by age 30. Children birthed by teenage mothers are more likely to do poorly in school and be abused or neglected, boys are thirteen percent more likely to end up in prison while girls are twenty-two percent more likely to become teenage mothers themselves.[1] And so on this cycle will continue unless the education system explains the “rules and regulations” of sex, in place of telling kids just not to do it.
Sources
1. National Center for Health Statistics, National Vital Statistics Report, Births: Final Data for 2006, January 2009. Web. Dec.5.2009
2. National Center for Health Statistics, National Vital Statistics Report, Births: Final Data for 2006, January 2009; National Campaign to Prevent Teen and Unplanned Pregnancy, By the Numbers: The Public Costs of Teen Childbearing, 2006.Web.Dec.5.20009
3. American Foundation for AIDS Research. Assessing the Efficacy of Abstinence-Only Programs for HIV Prevention among Young People. [Issue Brief, no. 2] Washington, DC: Author, 2005. Web. Dec.5.2009
4. Brückner H, Bearman P. After the promise: the STD consequences of adolescent virginity pledges. Journal of Adolescent Health 2005; 36:271-278.
5.Bearman PS, Brückner H. Promising the future: virginity pledges and first intercourse. American Journal of Sociology 2001; 106(4):859-912.
6.National Public Radio et al. Sex Education in America: NPR/Kaiser/Kennedy School Poll. Menlo Park, CA: Kaiser, 2004. Web.Dec.5.2009
Post Write.
Im not sure how i feel about this paper so far, its unfinished and it isnt as long as i would like it to be.
I think i want to add another minor cause and a few more effects and lenghten the paper up a bit
Do you think ive responded well to this assignment? Is teen pregnancy clearly defined as a trend in this piece. Is there enough information and statistics to back up my allegations?
Saturday, December 5, 2009
2012 2nd draft
Morrison, David. “2012 and Counting, a NASA scientist answers the top 20 questions about 2012” Skeptic volume 15 number 2 2009, AcademicOne.web.23.Nov.2009
In this Essay and Interview, Morrison expresses his frustration caused by and email flooded with questions from people concerned with Doomsday “myths and hoaxes” such as Nibiru; a supposed giant brown dwarf as large if not larger than the earth that is supposed to crash into and dissipate the planet sometime in the near future, And 2012; the predicted end of the world. Morrison also answers twenty questions from a NASA website [astrobiology.NASA.gov]. He concludes that all the talk of Nibiru, 2012, and most other doomsday scenarios are strictly fiction. They are just a way for the media to cash in while fueling the inferno of fear in the mind of many people.
David Morrison, a scientist for the National Aeronautics and Space Administration, answers twenty of the most popular questions posted by the public. The answers provided by Morrison could be viewed by a skeptic as bias and possibly false or misleading, but this is common nature of a skeptic anyway. A scientist may look at these answers as fact, truth, and nothing more. It seems that the answers given make sense, but if you are not a NASA employee or at the least an amateur astrologer you may not be so quick to accept. This is a problem that can not be solved because most skeptics do not work for NASA and must accept the words of Morrison on a very serious matter. He does not present much evidence but like he states, it is not the job of NASA to prove these claims false but the responsibility of the people presenting the claim to prove them truth. Morrison also urges people to do there own research if they are still a skeptic.
Post Write.
I dont really care for this paper, i like the topic but If you notice it is exactly the same as my first draft because I didnt receive any feedback to improve it and wasnt sure on my own how to impove it.
There is alot that needs to be changed on this paper i think. It is technically my first draft and i imagine there would be many errors.
Do you feel this is a good topic for this kind of writing piece ?
Is there anything specific that you like about the information provided?
Do you feel there is enough information for this type of paper?
In this Essay and Interview, Morrison expresses his frustration caused by and email flooded with questions from people concerned with Doomsday “myths and hoaxes” such as Nibiru; a supposed giant brown dwarf as large if not larger than the earth that is supposed to crash into and dissipate the planet sometime in the near future, And 2012; the predicted end of the world. Morrison also answers twenty questions from a NASA website [astrobiology.NASA.gov]. He concludes that all the talk of Nibiru, 2012, and most other doomsday scenarios are strictly fiction. They are just a way for the media to cash in while fueling the inferno of fear in the mind of many people.
David Morrison, a scientist for the National Aeronautics and Space Administration, answers twenty of the most popular questions posted by the public. The answers provided by Morrison could be viewed by a skeptic as bias and possibly false or misleading, but this is common nature of a skeptic anyway. A scientist may look at these answers as fact, truth, and nothing more. It seems that the answers given make sense, but if you are not a NASA employee or at the least an amateur astrologer you may not be so quick to accept. This is a problem that can not be solved because most skeptics do not work for NASA and must accept the words of Morrison on a very serious matter. He does not present much evidence but like he states, it is not the job of NASA to prove these claims false but the responsibility of the people presenting the claim to prove them truth. Morrison also urges people to do there own research if they are still a skeptic.
Post Write.
I dont really care for this paper, i like the topic but If you notice it is exactly the same as my first draft because I didnt receive any feedback to improve it and wasnt sure on my own how to impove it.
There is alot that needs to be changed on this paper i think. It is technically my first draft and i imagine there would be many errors.
Do you feel this is a good topic for this kind of writing piece ?
Is there anything specific that you like about the information provided?
Do you feel there is enough information for this type of paper?
Wednesday, November 25, 2009
2012
Morrison, David. “2012 and Counting, a NASA scientist answers the top 20 questions about 2012” Skeptic volume 15 number 2 2009, AcademicOne.web.23.Nov.2009
In this Essay and Interview, Morrison expresses his frustration caused by and email flooded with questions from people concerned with Doomsday “myths and hoaxes” such as Nibiru; a supposed giant brown dwarf as large if not larger than the earth that is supposed to crash into and dissipate the planet sometime in the near future, And 2012; the predicted end of the world. Morrison also answers twenty questions from a NASA website [astrobiology.NASA.gov]. He concludes that all the talk of Nibiru, 2012, and most other doomsday scenarios are strictly fiction. They are just a way for the media to cash in while fueling the inferno of fear in the mind of many people.
David Morrison, a scientist for the National Aeronautics and Space Administration, answers twenty of the most popular questions posted by the public. The answers provided by Morrison could be viewed by a skeptic as bias and possibly false or misleading, but this is common nature of a skeptic anyway. A scientist may look at these answers as fact, truth, and nothing more. It seems that the answers given make sense, but if you are not a NASA employee or at the least an amateur astrologer you may not be so quick to accept. This is a problem that can not be solved because most skeptics do not work for NASA and must accept the words of Morrison on a very serious matter. He does not present much evidence but like he states, it is not the job of NASA to prove these claims false but the responsibility of the people presenting the claim to prove them truth. Morrison also urges people to do there own research if they are still a skeptic.
Sunday, October 25, 2009
Are YOU Addicted? 2nd Draft.
Are YOU Addicted?
-63% of Fall River residents say they are addicted. Addicted to coffee.
By: Joshua Bonanca
FALL RIVER- The next time you pick up a cup of coffee you may be asking yourself, “Am I addicted to this”. Despite the recession across the country the continuous opening of Dunkin Donuts franchise coffee shops in the city of Fall River may lead you to believe many people are in fact addicted to coffee. Currently the city of Fall River is home to seventeen Dunkin Donut shops for a population of approximately ninety-one thousand people.
The second most valuable traded commodity in the world only to oil is coffee (National Coffee Association), which is basically derived from seeds of a coffee plant along with other chemical constituents. One of the main chemical constituents in coffee beans and freshly brewed Dunkin Donuts coffee is caffeine. As you may not know caffeine is considered a “GRAS” a Generally Recognized As Safe substance or drug to the FDA, but a drug none the less. According to the researchers at John Hopkins University it is not the caffeine in coffee but “altering the coffee-drinking routine that produces problems”. Simply stating when missing that morning cup of coffee you may experience a caffeine withdrawal with symptoms ranging from headache, nausea, muscle pain, and in more serious cases depression; that could last up to nine days depending on the amount you regularly drink. Some people may consider this to be an addiction, but it seems to be more of a personal opinion at this point.
The upside of being a heavy drinker is the health benefits it may produce. An article on the WebMD website reviewed by Michael W. Smith, MD says it may reduce the risk of such diseases as type 2 diabetes, Parkinson’s disease, colon cancer, and even be used as treatment for asthmas attacks. "Overall, the research shows that coffee is far more healthful than it is harmful," says Tomas DePaulis, PhD. "People who smoke and are heavy drinkers have less heart disease and liver damage when they regularly consume large amounts of coffee compared to those who don't," says DePaulis. But doesn’t drinking coffee everyday get costly? A recent U.S. survey revealed that 69% of American coffee drinkers consider coffee to be an “affordable luxury” (NCA).
I was still a skeptic of coffee addiction like many are, so I did my own research. I surveyed one hundred Dunkin Donuts coffee drinkers with one simple question. “Do you think that you are addicted to coffee” of the one hundred people 63% said they were addicted 31% said they were not and 6% said they really were not sure.
One woman said she was “absolutely addicted to coffee” “I drink at least ten twenty-four ounce cups each day” at two dollars and thirty-nine cent each; coffee “is breaking the bank” says Stacy Sousa who spends approximately $8700.00 a year. Some people may consider this to be an addiction. Are you addicted?
Post write:
I like this paper alot. Possibly because of my own coffee addiction and that I learned some new things while writting it.
I do believe there is room for improvment, in overall structure I am not very familiar with "news story" type writing structures yet.
some questions i could ask my readers; Do you like the piece? Anything specific you did or did not like in this story? Do you think you have a coffee addiction?
-63% of Fall River residents say they are addicted. Addicted to coffee.
By: Joshua Bonanca
FALL RIVER- The next time you pick up a cup of coffee you may be asking yourself, “Am I addicted to this”. Despite the recession across the country the continuous opening of Dunkin Donuts franchise coffee shops in the city of Fall River may lead you to believe many people are in fact addicted to coffee. Currently the city of Fall River is home to seventeen Dunkin Donut shops for a population of approximately ninety-one thousand people.
The second most valuable traded commodity in the world only to oil is coffee (National Coffee Association), which is basically derived from seeds of a coffee plant along with other chemical constituents. One of the main chemical constituents in coffee beans and freshly brewed Dunkin Donuts coffee is caffeine. As you may not know caffeine is considered a “GRAS” a Generally Recognized As Safe substance or drug to the FDA, but a drug none the less. According to the researchers at John Hopkins University it is not the caffeine in coffee but “altering the coffee-drinking routine that produces problems”. Simply stating when missing that morning cup of coffee you may experience a caffeine withdrawal with symptoms ranging from headache, nausea, muscle pain, and in more serious cases depression; that could last up to nine days depending on the amount you regularly drink. Some people may consider this to be an addiction, but it seems to be more of a personal opinion at this point.
The upside of being a heavy drinker is the health benefits it may produce. An article on the WebMD website reviewed by Michael W. Smith, MD says it may reduce the risk of such diseases as type 2 diabetes, Parkinson’s disease, colon cancer, and even be used as treatment for asthmas attacks. "Overall, the research shows that coffee is far more healthful than it is harmful," says Tomas DePaulis, PhD. "People who smoke and are heavy drinkers have less heart disease and liver damage when they regularly consume large amounts of coffee compared to those who don't," says DePaulis. But doesn’t drinking coffee everyday get costly? A recent U.S. survey revealed that 69% of American coffee drinkers consider coffee to be an “affordable luxury” (NCA).
I was still a skeptic of coffee addiction like many are, so I did my own research. I surveyed one hundred Dunkin Donuts coffee drinkers with one simple question. “Do you think that you are addicted to coffee” of the one hundred people 63% said they were addicted 31% said they were not and 6% said they really were not sure.
One woman said she was “absolutely addicted to coffee” “I drink at least ten twenty-four ounce cups each day” at two dollars and thirty-nine cent each; coffee “is breaking the bank” says Stacy Sousa who spends approximately $8700.00 a year. Some people may consider this to be an addiction. Are you addicted?
Post write:
I like this paper alot. Possibly because of my own coffee addiction and that I learned some new things while writting it.
I do believe there is room for improvment, in overall structure I am not very familiar with "news story" type writing structures yet.
some questions i could ask my readers; Do you like the piece? Anything specific you did or did not like in this story? Do you think you have a coffee addiction?
Monday, October 19, 2009
Are You Addicted ?
Are YOU Addicted?
By: Joshua Bonanca
Fall River- The next time you pick up a cup of coffee you may be asking yourself “am I addicted to this stuff?” Despite the recession across the country the continuous opening of Dunkin Donuts franchise coffee shops in the city of Fall River may lead you to believe many people are addicted. Currently the city of Fall River is home to seventeen Dunkin Donuts shops for a population of approximately ninety-one thousand people.
The second most valuable traded commodity in the world only to oil is coffee (National Coffee Association), which is basically derived from seeds of a coffee plant along with other chemical constituents. One of the main chemical constituents in coffee beans and freshly brewed Dunkin Donuts coffee is caffeine. As you may not know caffeine is considered a “GRAS” a Generally Recognized As Safe substance or drug to the FDA, but a drug none the less. According to the researchers at John Hopkins University it is not the caffeine but “altering the coffee-drinking routine that produces problems”. Simply stating when missing that morning cup of coffee you may experience a caffeine withdrawal with symptoms ranging from headache to nausea, muscle pain, and in more serious cases depression; that could last up to nine days depending on the amount you regularly drink. Some people may consider this to be an addiction, but it seems to be more of a personal opinion at this point. The upside of being a heavy drinker is the possible health benefits it may produce. An article on the WebMD website reviewed by Michael W. Smith, MD says it may reduce the risk of such diseases as type two diabetes, Parkinson’s disease, colon cancer, and even be used as a treatment for asthma attacks. “Overall, the research shows that coffee is far more healthful than it is harmful,” says Thomas Depauils, PHD. “People who smoke an are heavy drinkers have less heart disease and liver damage when they regularly consume large amounts of coffee compared to those who don’t,” says Depauils. But doesn’t drinking coffee everyday get costly? A recent U.S. survey revealed that 69% of American coffee drinkers consider coffee to be an “affordable luxury” (NCA).
I was still a skeptic of coffee addiction like many are, so I did my own research. I surveyed one hundred Dunkin Donuts coffee drinkers with one simple question. “Do you think you are addicted to coffee” of the one hundred people 63% said they were addicted 31% said they were not addicted and 6% said they really weren’t sure.
at two dollars and thirty-nine cent each Stacy Sousa says coffee cost are “breaking the bank” still she spends over $8700.00 a year. Some people may consider this to be an addiction. Are you addicted?
POST WRITE JOURNAL: NEWSPAPER ARTICLE
***How do you feel about the paper so far? Please explain and offer evidence from the work.
So far I like this paper. I just feel that I have too much information that can be included in this article so I had to just stick with the major things.
I want to get some opinions from various readers before I consider changing anything. I would leave the paper as it is now and just correct any writing errors.
Sunday, October 11, 2009
Childhood 2nd Draft
University Of Chicago College Admissions 2009/2010
Essay Option 2
The late-eighteenth-century popular philosopher and cultural critic George Lichtenberg wrote, "Just as we outgrow a pair of trousers, we outgrow acquaintances, libraries, principles, etc. at times before they're worn out and at times-and this is worst of all-before we have new ones." Write an essay about something you have outgrown, perhaps before you had a replacement-a friend, a political philosophy, a favorite author, or anything that has had an influence on you. What, if anything, has taken its place?
Through out life everyone will outgrown things. This happens from birth, you outgrow baby clothes and cribs, and it will continue to happen even if we may not want it to. When asked about something I have out grown numerous things come to mind, but few are worth writing about and only one is relevant to most people, childhood.
My childhood was a memorable and fun time. I remember going to the park, eating ice cream, and not doing my homework. People too often don’t have the chance to experience a good childhood, but I was fortunate enough to. I could stay up real late, wake up real early, and then go to school with more energy then an auctioneer. I could eat whatever I liked and never gain a pound. No problems, no stress, no bills, and best of all no responsibilities. I never wanted to outgrow childhood. I had it good.
Then came preteens, and teens. Then came the hormones and the girls and the influences. Then came the stress of a teenager, and the responsibility. Society calls it “adolescence” that took over a nice young problem free child. Adolescence took place of my childhood before I had a chance to fully enjoy it. I had girlfriends who needed the whole world at fourteen, teachers who wanted ten page research papers, and parents who wanted me to do chores. I remember thinking, “things will be a lot different after I get my license,” I don’t know why but at that time, I believed getting my license was the secret of the universe that just couldn’t wait to be unlocked. After adolescence the young adult stage spun me around so fast I had to stop and reassess things. I had jobs, college, and bills; things that were very new to me. Now I’m utilizing ssn numbers, filling out W2’s, and organizing my budget book.
“Responsibilities!, you have no responsibility!” my Dad would say.
“Oh I’ve got plenty,” I would reply at the age of ten or eleven. Well he can have them back. Everything used to be nice and carefree. Moving at my own pace with no worries; riding my bike around the neighborhood and hanging out. These days I feel like everything is on fast-forward; I would pause it if I could, to just take a breather for a few minutes, grab a coffee and then hit play again.
If I could go back in time I would try and hold on to that childhood state as long as I could because children these days don’t get to enjoy it either. The whole world is about growing up early and being the best first. When it should be about kids being kids and adults being lame, living life as it comes at you not as its thrown at you. If I only knew then what I know now, I would have thrown it right back and jumped on my big wheel and rode away shouting “Long live childhood”.
Post Write:
** How do you feel about the paper so far?
* I am not sure if i like it yet, I sometimes have a habit of going off topic and I dont know if i have done that here
**What remains to be done? Please be precise.
*I still need to proof read this paper thoroughly and correct grammatical errors and possibly change some sentences around , restructure the paper differently to be completely satisfied.
***What questions do you have for readers about the piece?
* Do you feel that i stay on topic and write this paper correctly?
*Is there anything particular that you enjoy about this piece?
Essay Option 2
The late-eighteenth-century popular philosopher and cultural critic George Lichtenberg wrote, "Just as we outgrow a pair of trousers, we outgrow acquaintances, libraries, principles, etc. at times before they're worn out and at times-and this is worst of all-before we have new ones." Write an essay about something you have outgrown, perhaps before you had a replacement-a friend, a political philosophy, a favorite author, or anything that has had an influence on you. What, if anything, has taken its place?
Through out life everyone will outgrown things. This happens from birth, you outgrow baby clothes and cribs, and it will continue to happen even if we may not want it to. When asked about something I have out grown numerous things come to mind, but few are worth writing about and only one is relevant to most people, childhood.
My childhood was a memorable and fun time. I remember going to the park, eating ice cream, and not doing my homework. People too often don’t have the chance to experience a good childhood, but I was fortunate enough to. I could stay up real late, wake up real early, and then go to school with more energy then an auctioneer. I could eat whatever I liked and never gain a pound. No problems, no stress, no bills, and best of all no responsibilities. I never wanted to outgrow childhood. I had it good.
Then came preteens, and teens. Then came the hormones and the girls and the influences. Then came the stress of a teenager, and the responsibility. Society calls it “adolescence” that took over a nice young problem free child. Adolescence took place of my childhood before I had a chance to fully enjoy it. I had girlfriends who needed the whole world at fourteen, teachers who wanted ten page research papers, and parents who wanted me to do chores. I remember thinking, “things will be a lot different after I get my license,” I don’t know why but at that time, I believed getting my license was the secret of the universe that just couldn’t wait to be unlocked. After adolescence the young adult stage spun me around so fast I had to stop and reassess things. I had jobs, college, and bills; things that were very new to me. Now I’m utilizing ssn numbers, filling out W2’s, and organizing my budget book.
“Responsibilities!, you have no responsibility!” my Dad would say.
“Oh I’ve got plenty,” I would reply at the age of ten or eleven. Well he can have them back. Everything used to be nice and carefree. Moving at my own pace with no worries; riding my bike around the neighborhood and hanging out. These days I feel like everything is on fast-forward; I would pause it if I could, to just take a breather for a few minutes, grab a coffee and then hit play again.
If I could go back in time I would try and hold on to that childhood state as long as I could because children these days don’t get to enjoy it either. The whole world is about growing up early and being the best first. When it should be about kids being kids and adults being lame, living life as it comes at you not as its thrown at you. If I only knew then what I know now, I would have thrown it right back and jumped on my big wheel and rode away shouting “Long live childhood”.
Post Write:
** How do you feel about the paper so far?
* I am not sure if i like it yet, I sometimes have a habit of going off topic and I dont know if i have done that here
**What remains to be done? Please be precise.
*I still need to proof read this paper thoroughly and correct grammatical errors and possibly change some sentences around , restructure the paper differently to be completely satisfied.
***What questions do you have for readers about the piece?
* Do you feel that i stay on topic and write this paper correctly?
*Is there anything particular that you enjoy about this piece?
Wednesday, October 7, 2009
Childhood
Through out life everyone will outgrown things. This happens from birth, you outgrow baby clothes and cribs. This will continue to happen even if we may not want it to. When asked about something I have out grown numerous things come to mind, but few are worth writing about and only one is relevant to most people, childhood.
My childhood was a grand and fun time. I remember going to the park, eating ice cream, and not doing my homework. People too often don’t have the chance to experience a good childhood, but I did. I could stay up real late, wake up real early, and then go to school with more energy then an auctioneer. I could eat whatever I liked and never gain a pound. No problems, no stress, no bills, and best of all no responsibilities. I never wanted to outgrow childhood. I had it good.
Then came preteens, and teens. Then came the hormones and the girls and the influences. Then came the stress of a teenager, and the responsibility. They call it adolescence that took over a nice young problem free child. Adolescence took place of my childhood before I had a chance to fully enjoy it. I had girlfriends who needed the whole world at 14, teachers who wanted ten page research papers, and parents who wanted me to do chores. I remember thinking, “things will be a lot different after I get my license” I don’t know why but at that time to me getting my license was the secret of the universe that just couldn’t wait to be unlocked. After adolescence the young adult stage spun me around so fast I had to stop and reassess things. I had jobs, college, and bills what are those? Now I’m utilizing ssn numbers filling out W2’s and organizing my budget book.
“Responsibilities!, you have no responsibility!” my dad would say
“Oh I’ve got plenty” I would reply at the age of ten or eleven. Well he can have them back. Things used to be nice and slow. Moving at my own pace no worries. Riding my bike around the neighborhood hanging out. These days I feel like everything is on fast-forward I would pause it if I could. Pause life and just take a breather for a few minutes, grab an energy drink and then hit play again.
If I could go back in time I would try and hold on to that childhood state as long as I could because children these days don’t get to enjoy it either, the whole world is about growing up early and being the best first. When it should be about kids being kids and adults being lame, living life as it comes at you not as its thrown at you. If I would have known what I did today I would have thrown it right back and jumped on my big wheel and rode away shouting “Long live childhood”.
My childhood was a grand and fun time. I remember going to the park, eating ice cream, and not doing my homework. People too often don’t have the chance to experience a good childhood, but I did. I could stay up real late, wake up real early, and then go to school with more energy then an auctioneer. I could eat whatever I liked and never gain a pound. No problems, no stress, no bills, and best of all no responsibilities. I never wanted to outgrow childhood. I had it good.
Then came preteens, and teens. Then came the hormones and the girls and the influences. Then came the stress of a teenager, and the responsibility. They call it adolescence that took over a nice young problem free child. Adolescence took place of my childhood before I had a chance to fully enjoy it. I had girlfriends who needed the whole world at 14, teachers who wanted ten page research papers, and parents who wanted me to do chores. I remember thinking, “things will be a lot different after I get my license” I don’t know why but at that time to me getting my license was the secret of the universe that just couldn’t wait to be unlocked. After adolescence the young adult stage spun me around so fast I had to stop and reassess things. I had jobs, college, and bills what are those? Now I’m utilizing ssn numbers filling out W2’s and organizing my budget book.
“Responsibilities!, you have no responsibility!” my dad would say
“Oh I’ve got plenty” I would reply at the age of ten or eleven. Well he can have them back. Things used to be nice and slow. Moving at my own pace no worries. Riding my bike around the neighborhood hanging out. These days I feel like everything is on fast-forward I would pause it if I could. Pause life and just take a breather for a few minutes, grab an energy drink and then hit play again.
If I could go back in time I would try and hold on to that childhood state as long as I could because children these days don’t get to enjoy it either, the whole world is about growing up early and being the best first. When it should be about kids being kids and adults being lame, living life as it comes at you not as its thrown at you. If I would have known what I did today I would have thrown it right back and jumped on my big wheel and rode away shouting “Long live childhood”.
Sunday, September 27, 2009
assignment #1 This I Believe 2nd draft.
“This I Believe”
People all around the world have beliefs. Different, similar, and identical beliefs. They believe in God. They believe in love. They believe in other people. I believe everything happens for a reason, for a purpose. I believe in Fate.
I believe there is a reason behind this madness we call life. I believe every step in this or that direction, every stubbed toe, spilled coffee cup, and broken arm is for a reason. When I get stuck at a red light or I miss my exit on the highway, I think.
“Would I have gotten into an accident if I darted through that yellow light?” Was there a deer crossing the road on that exit? This is Fate. (A fixed decree by which the order of things is prescribed; the immutable law of the universe; inevitable necessity; the force by which all existence is determined and conditioned. [1913 Webster]) This is what I believe. I believe in Fate.
Last week I was at my girlfriend’s house. She and I were watching a movie and working on homework. To make a long story short, we got in to a little disagreement. Now normally I wouldn’t have left considering I was supposed to spend the night but that night was different. I just left. And as soon as I did I felt strange like I was doing something wrong I’d made a mistake. No sooner that I got over this feeling am I driving down Eastern Avenue do I see this SUV driving on the other side of the avenue coming up. His vehicle starts to drift toward the sidewalk, up atop the sidewalk, and into a telephone pole right in front of the fire station. I stopped and ran over to this truck that was completely totaled, air bags deployed, the whole bit. Thankfully he was only a little shaken up. I called 911 and they dispatched rescue. The police quickly arrived and maybe after 10 minutes of the guy’s horn being amplified from the impact someone from the fire station came out too.
A day later I walk into CVS Pharmacy to get myself an Arnold Palmer half & half. There is one woman in front of me; she needs something from out of some case in the back that needed to be unlocked by an associate.
“No problem” says the cashier.
They walk away and leave me standing with a .99 cent drink in my hand. Well that’s just fine with me maybe a minute later another cashier comes to the front and tells me she can take me at the register down on the other end of the transaction counter.
“No problem” I reply.
I walk over, and I hand her my drink. She scans the can: .99 cents. I hand her a five. She gives me some change and a receipt. I jumble the money a bit and drop the receipt, so I go to pick it up. What’s this? It looks like a five dollar bill. Oh no wait it’s a Fifty dollar bill. Don’t mind if I do. I pick it up nonchalantly and I walk out. Fate? Was this a little repayment for a good deed the night before? I’ll take it.
Two summers ago I used to ride my street bike with a few other guys. I was the youngest. Everyone else was 20 or older. I had just gotten my permit and it’s illegal to drive after dark. But I did, we all did. We would drive up to Providence almost every night, Thayer St. There are little restaurants and shops but most important to a 16 year old boy, college girls. So why wouldn’t we be there every night? Well it’s Saturday night sometime in July. Just a beautiful night. And the guys call me up
“Hey hey you want to come up to prov tonight?”
“No I think I’m just going to hang in tonight. I’m feeling a little sick anyways” Which I was.
“Ok be a b****,” Tim says.
Yea yea whatever I will just talk to you later. Around midnight I get a call. They were racing some car on the highway. Josh hit the back of Timmy’s bike at 180mph and took a little bit of spill, he’s in the ICU at RI hospital. I need to wake up his cousin and bring him to Providence. Meanwhile an ER nurse is on her way to work, She sees the accident take place from the other side of the barrier. She is already preparing for him at the hospital. When we get to the hospital they obviously won’t let us see him or tall us anything. So we sit and wait. And wait. And then Timmy sees someone, some girl he knows from God knows where. And he talks her into getting us each a few minutes to see him while he is in the ICU. We do. Two at a time we go and talk to him. He’s covered in blankets because he is in shock and feels cold. The blankets are covered in blood. There was blood everywhere. There was blood running down the stainless steel of the bed cot he lay on down to the floor. A nurse had to come in with a mop and wipe it up. And he lay and shiver and the nurse would stand and mop. With ever second that I stay and tell him everything will be okay I am just thinking to myself. What if? What if I would have come out tonight? Would I be in the hospital bed now? I don’t know. And it simply leaves me with nothing left to believe but Fate, that everything happens for a reason.
You could say all of this is simply coincidence. You could say its all luck, good or bad. I believe it is not coincidence. I believe it is not luck. I believe there is a force by which all existence is determined and conditioned. I believe everything happens and does not happen for a reason I believe in fate.
Thursday, September 24, 2009
Assignment #1 "This I Believe"
People all around the world have beliefs. Different, similar, identical, beliefs. They believe in God. They believe in love. They believe in other people. I believe everything happens for a reason, for a purpose. I believe in Fate.
I believe there is a reason behind this madness we call life. I believe every step this direction, every stubbed toe or broken arm is for a reason. When I’m running late. When I get stuck at a red light or I miss my exit on the highway, I think .. Would I have gotten into an accident if I darted through that yellow light? Was there a deer crossing the road on that exit? This is fate. (A fixed decree by which the order of things is prescribed; the immutable law of the universe; inevitable necessity; the force by which all existence is determined and conditioned. [1913 Webster]) This is what I believe. I believe in fate.
Last week I was at my girlfriends house. She and I were watching a movie and working on some homework. Long story short we got into a little disagreement. Now normally I wouldn’t have left considering I was supposed to spend the night but that night was different. I just left. And as soon as I did I felt strange like I was doing something wrong, id had made a mistake. No sooner that I got over this feeling am I driving down eastern avenue do I see this SUV driving on the other side of the avenue coming up. He vehicle starts to drift toward the sidewalk up atop the sidewalk and into a telephone pole right in front of the fire station. I stopped and ran over to this truck that was completely totaled air bags deployed the whole bit. Thankfully he was only a little shaken up. I called 911 and the dispatched rescue. The police quickly arrived and maybe 10 minutes of the guy’s horn being amplified from the impact someone from the fire station came out too.
A day later I walk into cvs pharmacy to get myself an Arnold Palmer half & half. There is one women in front of me, she needs something from out of some case in the back that needed to be unlocked by an associate. The cashier says “no problem” and they both walk away and leave me standing with my .99 cent drink in my hand. Well that’s just fine with me maybe a minute later another cashier comes to the front and tells me she can take me at the register down on the other end of the transaction counter. “No problem” I reply. I walk over, and I hand her my drink. She scans the can, .99 cents. I hand her a five. She gives me some change and a receipt. I jumble the money a bit and drop the receipt, so I go to pick it up. What’s this?
It looks like a five dollar bill. Oh no wait it’s a Fifty dollar bill. Don’t mind if I do. I pick it up nonchalantly and I walk out. Fate? A little repayment for a good deed the night before? I’ll take it.
Two summers ago I used to ride my street bike with a few other guys. I was the youngest. Everyone else was 20 or older. I had just gotten my permit and its illegal to drive after dark. But I did, we all did. We would drive up to providence almost every night , Thayer st. theirs little restaurants and shops but most important to a 16 year old boy, college girls. So why wouldn’t we be up there every night. Well its Saturday night sometime in July. Just a beautiful night. And the guys call me up, hey hey you want to come up to prov tonight. No I think I’m just going to hang in tonight I‘m feeling a little sick anyways. Which I was. Ok ok be a b**** , yea yea I’ll talk to you later. Around midnight I get a call. They were racing some car on the highway Josh hit the back of Timmy’s bike at 180mph and took a little bit of a spill, he’s in the ICU at RI hospital I need to wake up his cousin and bring him to providence. Meanwhile and ER nurse is on her way to work she sees the accident take place from the other side of the jersey barrier she is already preparing for him at the hospital. When we get to the hospital they obviously wont let us see him or tell us anything. So we sit and wait. And wait. And then Timmy sees someone, some girl he knows from god knows where. And he talks her into getting us each a few minutes to see him while he is in the ICU. We do. Two at a time we go and talk to him. He’s covered in blankets because he thinks he is cold from the shock. The blankets are covered in blood. There was blood everywhere. There was blood running down the stainless steel of the cot he lay on to the floor. A nurse had to come in with a mop and wipe it up. And he lay and shiver and the nurse would stand and mop. With every second that I stay and tell him everything will be ok I am just thinking to myself. What if? What if I would have came out tonight? Would I be in a hospital bed now? I don’t know. And it simply leaves me with nothing left to believe but fate. That everything happens for a reason.
You could say all of this is simply coincidence. You could say its all luck, good or bad. I believe it is not coincidence. I believe it is not luck. I believe there is a force by which all existence is determined and conditioned. I believe everything happens and does not happen for a reason. I believe in fate.
Joshua Bonanca
English 11 Dr.Tinberg Post Write: This I believe
How do you feel about the paper so far? Please explain and offer evidence from the work.
I feel that this piece is a fairly solid first draft that gives me a good foundation to work with and improve.
This piece has three real events that follow up my belief in telling how my belief wasn’t necessarily formed but held together and basically reassured every so often.
What remains to be done? Please be precise.
I’m sure much of the grammar and punctuation needs to be changed. I tried to really work together a solid starting point so I can take in criticism and build on this piece rather then build destroy and rebuild. It may or may not have to be shortened. I use a small text size so I am not sure.
What questions do you have for readers about the piece?
Do you believe in fate?
How do you feel about the paper so far ?
What are you criticisms?
Good points and bad points of this piece?
I believe there is a reason behind this madness we call life. I believe every step this direction, every stubbed toe or broken arm is for a reason. When I’m running late. When I get stuck at a red light or I miss my exit on the highway, I think .. Would I have gotten into an accident if I darted through that yellow light? Was there a deer crossing the road on that exit? This is fate. (A fixed decree by which the order of things is prescribed; the immutable law of the universe; inevitable necessity; the force by which all existence is determined and conditioned. [1913 Webster]) This is what I believe. I believe in fate.
Last week I was at my girlfriends house. She and I were watching a movie and working on some homework. Long story short we got into a little disagreement. Now normally I wouldn’t have left considering I was supposed to spend the night but that night was different. I just left. And as soon as I did I felt strange like I was doing something wrong, id had made a mistake. No sooner that I got over this feeling am I driving down eastern avenue do I see this SUV driving on the other side of the avenue coming up. He vehicle starts to drift toward the sidewalk up atop the sidewalk and into a telephone pole right in front of the fire station. I stopped and ran over to this truck that was completely totaled air bags deployed the whole bit. Thankfully he was only a little shaken up. I called 911 and the dispatched rescue. The police quickly arrived and maybe 10 minutes of the guy’s horn being amplified from the impact someone from the fire station came out too.
A day later I walk into cvs pharmacy to get myself an Arnold Palmer half & half. There is one women in front of me, she needs something from out of some case in the back that needed to be unlocked by an associate. The cashier says “no problem” and they both walk away and leave me standing with my .99 cent drink in my hand. Well that’s just fine with me maybe a minute later another cashier comes to the front and tells me she can take me at the register down on the other end of the transaction counter. “No problem” I reply. I walk over, and I hand her my drink. She scans the can, .99 cents. I hand her a five. She gives me some change and a receipt. I jumble the money a bit and drop the receipt, so I go to pick it up. What’s this?
It looks like a five dollar bill. Oh no wait it’s a Fifty dollar bill. Don’t mind if I do. I pick it up nonchalantly and I walk out. Fate? A little repayment for a good deed the night before? I’ll take it.
Two summers ago I used to ride my street bike with a few other guys. I was the youngest. Everyone else was 20 or older. I had just gotten my permit and its illegal to drive after dark. But I did, we all did. We would drive up to providence almost every night , Thayer st. theirs little restaurants and shops but most important to a 16 year old boy, college girls. So why wouldn’t we be up there every night. Well its Saturday night sometime in July. Just a beautiful night. And the guys call me up, hey hey you want to come up to prov tonight. No I think I’m just going to hang in tonight I‘m feeling a little sick anyways. Which I was. Ok ok be a b**** , yea yea I’ll talk to you later. Around midnight I get a call. They were racing some car on the highway Josh hit the back of Timmy’s bike at 180mph and took a little bit of a spill, he’s in the ICU at RI hospital I need to wake up his cousin and bring him to providence. Meanwhile and ER nurse is on her way to work she sees the accident take place from the other side of the jersey barrier she is already preparing for him at the hospital. When we get to the hospital they obviously wont let us see him or tell us anything. So we sit and wait. And wait. And then Timmy sees someone, some girl he knows from god knows where. And he talks her into getting us each a few minutes to see him while he is in the ICU. We do. Two at a time we go and talk to him. He’s covered in blankets because he thinks he is cold from the shock. The blankets are covered in blood. There was blood everywhere. There was blood running down the stainless steel of the cot he lay on to the floor. A nurse had to come in with a mop and wipe it up. And he lay and shiver and the nurse would stand and mop. With every second that I stay and tell him everything will be ok I am just thinking to myself. What if? What if I would have came out tonight? Would I be in a hospital bed now? I don’t know. And it simply leaves me with nothing left to believe but fate. That everything happens for a reason.
You could say all of this is simply coincidence. You could say its all luck, good or bad. I believe it is not coincidence. I believe it is not luck. I believe there is a force by which all existence is determined and conditioned. I believe everything happens and does not happen for a reason. I believe in fate.
Joshua Bonanca
English 11 Dr.Tinberg Post Write: This I believe
How do you feel about the paper so far? Please explain and offer evidence from the work.
I feel that this piece is a fairly solid first draft that gives me a good foundation to work with and improve.
This piece has three real events that follow up my belief in telling how my belief wasn’t necessarily formed but held together and basically reassured every so often.
What remains to be done? Please be precise.
I’m sure much of the grammar and punctuation needs to be changed. I tried to really work together a solid starting point so I can take in criticism and build on this piece rather then build destroy and rebuild. It may or may not have to be shortened. I use a small text size so I am not sure.
What questions do you have for readers about the piece?
Do you believe in fate?
How do you feel about the paper so far ?
What are you criticisms?
Good points and bad points of this piece?
Sunday, September 13, 2009
Men battling their weight
Cohen’s argument suggests, “six pack abs and tony triceps plastered across magazine covers and ads,” is the reason why there’s a growing number of the male population contending with anorexia, binge-and-purge eating, and obsessive workouts.” Meaning more and more males are striving or struggling in rivalry or battle with manorexia a term used for males suffering from anorexia nervosa- an eating disorder in which the effected is driven to lose or maintain an abnormally low weight for there age and height. Binge-and-purge eating- when a person will binge eat or eat excessive amount or food and then vomit all the food back out repeating this process each time they eat. And obsessively working out or working out too much.
Although I do not agree with Cohen I do not disagree completely. I believe that the media and its affiliates do influence men and the image they attempt to create for themselves. However I think women are the grander or main influence in a man’s self image. Men have the habit to try and impress beautiful women. Men love women. And for the most part men love sex. And women don’t want to have sex with overweight out of shape men. At least that’s what men choose to believe. So they look around, they observe what they think women want. In movies, magazines, reality television, and talk shows. The outcome of this in depth observation is women want this tall, dark, Brad Pitt style man in Calvin Klein boxer briefs. Then comes the gym membership followed by the diet plan.
From a more personal perspective I can not say I know any men who suffer from an eating disorder thankful. One example I can shed light on is what a friend of mine would call a “typical;” a typical Fall River guy and its because of the women they desire that these typical Fall River guys become very much identical. A typical is always dressed like he has somewhere really important to go. Always has his hair pampered. A typical offend spends more time in the bathroom to get dressed and ready than a girl would. There wardrobe consists of Ed Hardy, Nike Air Jordan, Artful Dodger, and LRG knockoffs. They all have their ears pierced with a beautiful set of cubic zirconeions. You can walk into a Providence club on a Friday night and lay eyes on the entire Ed Hardy clothing line for that season. These young men do this to attempt to attract women they believe are attracted to such foolishness. If they could allow themselves to look so ridiculous amongst the tens of 100’s that look just like them, it is not hard to believe that other men would develop true diseases over obsession of self images.
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